Sunday, February 23, 2014

The Rape

Sleep on and hear nothing.
Black Gold, Texas Tea.
Sleep on while outside Mama cries.
Mama screams.
Sleep on and see nothing.
Mama bleeds.
Sleep on and feel nothing.
Mama struggles, Mama chokes.
Be the silent partner,
while outside,
Mama dies.

© copyright K. Lynette Erwin, 2014

Mag 208
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22 comments :

  1. GailFebruary 23, 2014 at 9:45 AM

    Oh, my, wonderfully strong!

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  2. Magaly GuerreroFebruary 23, 2014 at 10:41 AM

    My hand flew to my heart. I can't help but wonder what will happen when he wakes up...

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  3. KayFebruary 23, 2014 at 11:31 AM

    brutal...

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  4. Kaye WallerFebruary 23, 2014 at 11:53 AM

    Exceptionally good. You went in a completely different direction than anyone else. Brava!

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  5. BerowneFebruary 23, 2014 at 12:14 PM

    Powerful indeed...

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  6. The Blog of BeeFebruary 23, 2014 at 1:09 PM

    That IS powerful.

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  7. The Blog of BeeFebruary 23, 2014 at 1:21 PM

    I had to come back having read your post about this on Face Book. Now that I have read the thinking behind the poem, I can say with even more conviction, this IS powerful.

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  8. JinksyFebruary 23, 2014 at 4:01 PM

    Unexpected interpretation of this prompt...

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    1. LynetteFebruary 23, 2014 at 4:50 PM

      I live in Oklahoma where we've been experiencing earthquakes due to hydraulic chemical fracturing or "fracking". Yesterday where I live we had four earthquakes that registered between 2.9 and 3.1. Granted, they weren't big, but we felt them and it was unsettling, especially considering that we don't normally have earthquakes in Oklahoma and these are caused by man. It's the rape of our land. That's where my head was at when I saw this prompt.

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  9. Jeannette,February 23, 2014 at 9:28 PM

    great imagination!

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  10. kalpana solsiFebruary 24, 2014 at 12:38 AM

    Reading about the earthquakes that have hit your city , this poem is very apt. While man ravages Nature , Nature hits us back. though-provoking poem.

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  11. humbirdFebruary 24, 2014 at 6:52 AM

    'Be silent partner' ~ after tragedy what else...~ strong reminder to respect the nature, our home...

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  12. Kathe W.February 24, 2014 at 9:56 AM

    very powerful.

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  13. Bekkie SanchezFebruary 24, 2014 at 10:42 AM

    Wow! Unreal and everyone else has said it but powerful.

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  14. 21 WitsFebruary 24, 2014 at 12:14 PM

    Ouch!

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  15. Jennifer WagnerFebruary 24, 2014 at 1:16 PM

    Ohh...heartbreaking!

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  16. Jennifer WagnerFebruary 24, 2014 at 1:18 PM

    Strong the way you did this to bring awareness...and hopefully change...

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  17. HelenaFebruary 25, 2014 at 11:58 AM

    Intense. I so enjoyed this! Poor Mama!

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  18. LynetteFebruary 25, 2014 at 1:51 PM

    Thanks everyone for your comments! This is only my second time with the Magpie writing prompt and only my second poem ever. I never considered myself a poet, but I think I must might have some talent for it. :)

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  19. Tess KincaidFebruary 26, 2014 at 12:24 PM

    The kind folk said "move away from there"...

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  20. Belva Rae StaplesFebruary 26, 2014 at 2:42 PM

    This may be short, but it packs a wallop.

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